In many developing country, the state of a number of children who are overweight is more and more serious. There are a plenty of reasons for this situation. It could be because of fast food, lacking of exercise and the concern of their parents.
Firstly, junk foods partly contribute to the state of overweight of children. Fast food is extremely ubiquitous all over the world. Because of its convenience, people choose to eat it without caring about its negative effects. The taste of most of their dishes is incredibly palatable that make children mouth-watering. To bring consumer tasty food, producers can use some substances that are supposed to be not good for our health such as MSG, preservative and so on. Secondly, these days children usually spending their leisure times on televions, computer games or social medias. Playing sports or going out to somewhere is not their first choice anymore. Sometimes they are so addicted to playing video games that make them feel lazy to act. Because of laziness, they can sit all days with only their phone and do not think of doing exercise. When they consume a lot of things without playing any sports or doing any exercise, overweight state is inevitable. Finally, the lacking of parents’ concern also leads to obesity of children. At many developing country, parents are considered not to havve enough time to take care of their children. They usually spend most of their time on working to make a living. So that as long as seeing their children be alive well, they will not pay attention to what they eat today, have they done exercises, etc.
To solve this problem, children have to eat healthy food everyday instead of junk food. Besides, playing sports has to be focused on because it also the way that keep them fit and healthy. There are many kinds of workout such as playing sport, running or just walking long enough to burn out the essentail calories. And last but not least, parents have to look after their child carefully. They should pay more attention to the food their children consume, and their lifestyle. They need to not let bad habits turn to their children lifestyle. They have to cook more home-cooked meals to supplement enough nutrions for their kids.
To sum up, the three popular reasons that bring about the overweight state of children are eating fast-food too much, lacking of doing exercise and shortage of their parent’s concern. There are many solutions for this problem. The imrotant one is that parents have to pay much attention their children health. They should encourage their child to do exercise and eat more nutrion food.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...at today, have they done exercises, etc. To solve this problem, children have to ...
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Suggestion: workouts
...it and healthy. There are many kinds of workout such as playing sport, running or just ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...abits turn to their children lifestyle. They have to cook more home-cooked meals to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, as to, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 446.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89910313901 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47666927294 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495515695067 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1679609412 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0357142857 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9285714286 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162209597511 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485026134148 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466876432911 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120281115489 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435515017523 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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