In many countries, teenagers have a part-time job while still at school. Do you think it is a good idea? Use reasons and details to support your view.
Part-time job is a job which you can schedule your work time. Some people fear that a part-time job makes teenagers reduce attention to their studies. However, other people think taking a part-time job is advantage for teenagers for two reasons.
First of all, teenagers can earn money from their part-time job. Today, teenagers have many requirements, and sometimes their parents felt that the requirements was not necessary. Hence, a part-time job can help them have amout of money to meet their needs. For example, they can buy a lot of things such as books, clothes, play station or buy a gift for the girl or boy they like. It is clear that teenagers can earn money by myself, they can learn how to effectively manage finances. With a lot of request, they will learn to budget between books, clothes and things. Therefore, they will have money management skills. It is obvious that a part time job is economically useful for teenagers.
Another benefits of part time job for teenagers is social skills. Firstly, they will learn how to handle responsibility. Being a good student takes a lot of responsibility but if they can learn how to balance between school studies, school activities and a part time job, they will know the true meaning of responsibility which will better prepare for their future. Secondly, they have valuable experience. While they are working a part time job, they will learn some experience working, and the fact that they have key work skills such as customer service, team work and like, which surely help teenagers prepare for full time job in the future. As the result, teenagers who have a part time job, will look more impressed with the potential employers.
In conclusion, having a part time job is a good idea from my point of view. It brings not only money but also social skills for teenagers, and they were encouraged to take a job after school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80674846626 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58922780836 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493865030675 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.2712996087 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4736842105 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283189281343 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116193435195 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827429453232 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209811855607 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431728868529 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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