Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree

It is true that manufactured food and drink with high levels of sugar will increase the probability of people's suffering from health problems sucn as diabetes or heart diseases. While there is no obvious connections that rising the price of sugary products will encourage people of consume less sugar. I will address my views as follows.

To begin with, sugary products is the direct source of sugar which will be absorbed by our body without conversion. However, there are lots of other food resource can provide sugar to us. For instance, the carbonhydrates like wheat or potatoes. When they are eaten by us,they will be converted to sugar by saliva in our mouths. Thus the sugar product is not the only food resource can level up our glucose which may cause disease. So if we make the sugary product more expensive, there are still other resouces could make our health problems.

Moreover, if we want to reduce health problems related with sugar, like the resources of the surgar taken by our bodies, the ways varies. If people do not like doing sports, instead,they eat normally but like sitting in the chairs or lying in the bed, there are also higher possiblities to have health problems since if we do not have enough excercise, the food will be stored as fat in our bodies. Thus still we will suffer from the health issues.

The last but not the least, by the development of modern food technology, there will be new solutions to the sugary products.Such as the emergence of new sugar with zero calories, which is not sugar at all.This new kind of healthy sweeteners will handle the problems of people's demand for sugar flavor and do not need to concern these health issues.

To conclude, I do not agree with the higher pricing sugary product solution to reduce sugar-related health problems, there is no apparent effect that could encourage people to take less sugar.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for instance, kind of, such as, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83641975309 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50397299 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515432098765 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.1428874606 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.928571429 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377369438408 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133758445901 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898936044681 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229759671085 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620482439887 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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