In today’s rapidly developing globalized world, impact of celebrities on children has become one of the most controversial issues requiring immediate attention. In what comes next, I will do my best to explain why people from TV screens can be dangerous for youngsters.
While there are a number of possible ways to justify my position, one of the main arguments in this debate is that adolescents tend to copy not always excellent behavior of famous people. It is known that bad actions are better for grabbing attention; consequently, stars demonstrate scandals, immoral acts more willingly and often. A case in point was great amount of rappers, who lead an unhealthy lifestyle and even use drugs and show all this in their music video. Despite the above mentioned the singers have big audience among teenagers.
A different, yet principal reason is that because of too much celebrity TV coverage, young people are able to sit in front of TV screen for hours not thinking about other important deals, such as homework and housework. One can take my thirteen-year-old sister. When she comes from school, she immediately starts watching Utube videos with the participation of well-known bloggers. As results, she has not enough time for anything else and then sister is sitting and doing her homework until night.
To conclude, I totally agree that too many media coverage of celebrities is having a bad influence on kids. Of course, it has its entertaining merits, but to avoid bad consequences time spent watching movies should be limited for children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun coverage seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much media coverage', 'a good deal of media coverage'.
Suggestion: much media coverage; a good deal of media coverage
... To conclude, I totally agree that too many media coverage of celebrities is having a bad influenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, so, then, well, while, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1171875 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89268296674 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.7109375 0.561755894193 127% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6322863284 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.166666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160490685921 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524014240361 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645163330467 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957548838832 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516450589727 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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