Many people think that every individual is responsible for their happiness but some people believe there are other external factors that influence us Discuss both views and give your opinion

To being happy, is also work as stress-buster. Some individual espouse that every person is accountable for their joy. However others think that there are various outside factors that affect us more.personally ,I believe that everyone responsible for their happiness and I will discuss both views in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with , the prominent reason why some people believe that there are other external factors that influence us more is that they have hectic schedule because they mostly engross in their greulling schedule. Therefore, they use various television shows, comic books, other things to make them happy. For instance most of the Indian citizens prefer to watch "The Kapil Sharma show" just to relax and make pleasure themselves. Hence, mostly people give preference to other factors in order feel exhilaration.

On the paradoxical side, there are numerous people who think that everyone is accountable for their won pleasure.The reason behind this is self- love because they do not want to depend on other for their won well being. Therefore,they always spend most time with own and try to feel happy without the assistance of others. To examplify, survey was conducted which showed that 65% of people enjoy their own company as compared to others.

In conclusion, this is totally depend upon person to person because everyone have different thinking level. In my perspective, everyone is answerable for their own joy rather than other external factors.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1263.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 235.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37446808511 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7181435515 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617021276596 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4428509568 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.25 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373694856406 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123085538311 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104864881861 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212695914613 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949966017523 0.056905535591 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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