Nowadays, many students tend to compete with their fellow friends rather than sharing their ideas when the examination commences. In this essay, Personally, I think that the consequences of having this mindset might have some advantages, but its demerits are more significant.
Most parents believe that making our child be more competitive in their study would make their child feels more pressured to do well and in turn, their academic results will be improved. This thinking is true to some extent as these children will become more concentrated and become serious in their studies and develop some ambitions in themselves to have a better career in the future because they have a very clear goal in their minds.
On the other hand, this mindset is like a double-edged sword which causes some harmful effects to the student rather than being beneficial to them. First, these children will have some serious problems in their social skills as they do not want to talk to their friends and help each other discussing their problems. In some cases, they become too egotistic, thinking they are way better than other students and become more careless in their learning and not wanted to get better marks. This could have a tremendous impact when they grow up and work in places that require high interaction with people.
Secondly, in some worst-case scenarios,intense study can cause these children to become more stressful which could lead to depression and have a tendency to attempt suicide if they do not get up to their desired marks.
In conclusion, I personally think that treating these children this way will lead to depression and social anxiety rather than improving them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 39, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , intense
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in conclusion, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10394265233 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57422039753 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52688172043 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.5435203289 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.4 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196739545864 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903153157057 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633756817946 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109768924035 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522179988402 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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