The money spending on the arts
Nowadays, the primary sources of the government expenses are not only public services, but also the arts. It is argued that the money which is spent on the arts is unnecessary. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of spending money on public services, but it does not mean that we should neglect the arts.
There is one point which everybody agrees that the investment in public services is essential for the society. First, public services are such places that we can educate or recover people. Take schools or hospitals for example. Without such places, the health of society may decrease. Additionally, our future generation cannot be as educated as they should be. For these reasons, the money which is spent on public services can be regarded as the investment for the future.
However, this does not mean other expenses such as on the arts should be completely ignored. In my opinion, the government must keep the balance, as they are as important as public services. With regard to the arts, it reflects the society’s intellectual level, the culture and the traditions of the country. Besides, many people can derive a great pleasure from observing these things, so they may want to go theatres and museums. As a result, the arts can also be concerned as entertainment facilities, which government should invest in.
To sum up, I believe that a large amount of the investment should go into the public services as they determine the quality of life. However, the money spending on the arts is not a waste of money, as their impacts on our life are too visible to ignore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78545454545 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67831450637 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512727272727 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7639420443 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.25 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225432902816 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772903641917 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133652904598 0.0667982634062 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169559923299 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117841986212 0.056905535591 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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