Music should not be taught in schools. Instead other subjects like computer and science should be taught. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, schools are the priority one's to educate the children with different subject's. Some people believe that subjects such as computer and science should be taught in schools rather than music. This essay will argue why music is necessary instead of learning computer and science.

To begin with, by teaching the subject's such as computer and science, students can gain ethical knowledge and awareness of environment. Meanwhile, it should be capable for the students to learn such standards of education. As the same way, the students should reach high position by learning them because it would be the first step to their success. For Instance, if the poor knowledge child could not be able to learn the subject's then the child will be in a unbalanced life. These few things lead to an unconditioned and as well as an unemphatic situation to a student.

On the other hand, music is a subject and also a passion for some children. Music teaches many important characteristics to the student related nice position and calm nature. Through Learning music the persons become popular as the same way they can be in a reputed profession and also it is a stress buster. For example, music gives different platforms to perform their skills and can become a great musician. By listening or learning the music the person feels pleasant and it might reduces the temper. Overall, music is more essential to learn to decrease many of illness and also to create a spirit for the students to learn it.

This essay argued that the music is important for everyone to learn rather than computer and science for the children in the school. In my opinion, not only computer and science are needed to learn, music is also a part for learning in the school life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reasons'' or 'reason's'?
Suggestion: reasons'; reason's
...art rates and blood pressure. For these reasons music will always be an essential subje...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52898550725 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91357519122 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557971014493 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1048871379 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.384615385 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2307692308 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276134396002 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998189088922 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106960553515 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186897362509 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942914344221 0.056905535591 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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