New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years there have been major shifts in the way young children enjoy their leisure time as a result of modern technological advancements. While I accept that these changes can sometimes have positive effects, I believe that they are more likely to have adverse impacts on children.
On the one hand, there are possible benefits that this trend could bring about. Firstly, children will have more choices on the activities they can do in their free time. For instance, digital devices such as tablets or smartphones offer a diversity of applications and games that can keep young kids engaged for a long period of time. This could leave their parents with more time to focus on their work and other priorities. Secondly, many of these games and apps are highly educational. As a result, they may help encourage the children’s learning and creativity.
On the other hand, I would argue that the drawbacks of these changes are more significant that the advantages for various reasons. Spending too much time on electronic devices can lead to serious health problems. Nowadays, children seem less responsive to physical recreations, which contributes greatly to the increasing rates of obesity. Also, prolonged exposure to the harmful blue light from computer or phone screens can possibly damage their vision. The unhealthy content that can be found on the Internet via new technological tools also poses another significant problem. Take the recent frightening Momo phenomenon as a solid example. It is reported that several children at very young age have fallen victim to this dangerous trend, and casualties have been incurred.
To conclude, I believe that the potential dangers of children’s modern way of spending their spare time using new technologies are much more significant the possible advantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... can keep young kids engaged for a long period of time. This could leave their parents with mo...
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Line 5, column 423, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ue light from computer or phone screens can possibly damage their vision. The unhealthy cont...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28424657534 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82584470422 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595890410959 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.009764263 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4375 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313904731668 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903489148215 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838668028925 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206472519068 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407345215212 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.