New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that with the appearance of new technologies, children nowadays spend more time with the latest techonological devices. In my opinion, this change can bring both advantages and disadvantages, it depends on the parents’ guidance and supervision. By ‘guidance and supervision’, I mean how the parents teach their children what to watch, what to play, how much time should be spent, etc.
On the one hand, without proper guidance and supervision, the new technologies can affect children in more than one way. First, parents allowing their children to use those devices for too long may lead to health problems in the kids. Those who keep their eyes glued to the screen too much will eventually suffer due to eye-strain. Moreover, spending too much time with those devices means that the kids will have less time playing outside and doing exercises, which can lead to an unhealth lifestyle that can affect them later in life. Second, the Internet is a place with many things that children should not have been allowed to see yet, things that could affect them mentally, such as pornography and violent stuff. There is a chance that the children will find out these stuff if they are allowed to surf the Internet freely.
On the other hand, under proper guidance and supervision, the new technologies can be utilised for many purposes. They encourage children to spent their free time on broadening their knowledge, thus allowing the children’s talents to be discovered early, as evidenced by those 9-year-old geniuses that work for Apple, IBM, etc. Another reason is that the Internet gives children more oppurtunities to make friends, both friends from the same country or from others, using social networks like Facebook or Twitter. Consequently, it encourages children to keep a habbit of developing a network of friends, which will be an essential skill when they are older.
In conclusion, new techonologies bring both advantages and disadvantages. It is the parents’ responsibility to guide their children so that they can bring out the advantages of those technologies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devices'' or 'device's'?
Suggestion: devices'; device's
...over, spending too much time with those devices means that the kids will have less time...
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not have been allowed to see yet, things that could affect them mentally, such as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, i mean, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21407624633 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01321039447 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539589442815 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7607288107 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.533333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284623808458 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902271383987 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460847266972 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169825745572 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159668434922 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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