nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. Do you agree with this? What does this trend cause?
In recent years, a myriad of people subscribe to the view that well-known people, instead of being famous for their accomplishments, are more popular for their luxurious and affluent life which leads to detrimental influence on teenagers. From my perspective, this opinion is completely well-grounded and this paper will provide justifications to support it as well as discuss several effects that this trend causes.
First and foremost, it is irrefutable that idols are now using their wealth to attain reputation. These people might inherit their assets from their parents, family, or they might be lucky to marry a well-to-do person or even, they took advantage of scandals, gossip, reality shows to polish themselves. For example, Kim Kardashian’s family has its own show just to show off their private and luxury life in a colossal mansion. Moreover, this phenomenon would render adverse impacts on children who have a lack of awareness. Thanks to the wide-spread “idol culture”, do youngsters imitate celebrities’ lifestyle of glamorous and luxurious. The temptation of buying brand products cannot be resisted, which leads teenagers to steal money from their parents, triggering the rate of juvenile delinquency.
This phenomenon has resulted in some effects on people generally. First of all, numerous works of art by great and gifted artists could be ignored since all spotlights are being focused on those with glamorous appearance. Consequently, significant dedications of true artists will be taken for granted and devalued. Additionally, this tendency will bring about the destruction of ethical values as adolescents only pursue to have stunning exterior outward and luxurious way of life instead of broadening their horizons. Spirit values and moral values will be neglected causing demoralization as well as degeneration of civilization.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that superstars who have a reputation for their affluence may be a bad example for kids. Apart from that, I believe there are still numerous well-known people acting as positive role models.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53894080997 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0602525897 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635514018692 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1066407982 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.533333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301754463825 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883760385588 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623124435705 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181995044017 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525217952484 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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