Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievement, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it has been argued that well-known people in entertainment businesses are more famous rest of their riches and lavish lifestyles rather than their true competence, and this sets a negative example for the young generation. From my point of view, while I agree with this statement, I still believe many others build their reputations based on their talent and effort and become good models for adolescents.
On the one hand, I reckon that some people who rise to fame for their glamorous lifestyles, not for hard work have given children a twisted perspective on life’s values. Indeed, these celebrities may achieve fame and wealth from their parents, partners, families, or from being scandalous. Through videos or posts on social media showing off luxurious items they possess, they may instill in young audiences the aspiration of pursuing materialism which is harmful. Moreover, they mislead the young about the right way to achieve success, which is using wealth rather than dedication and effort. Take the Kardashians for example, they build an empire of reality shows by showing their quarrels, infidelities, and luxurious partying - which are not healthy behaviors that the young generation should learn.
On the other hand, I still suppose that there are various self-made celebrities with admirable qualities and accomplishments can positively influence young people. These popular stars who work their way up with talents, work ethics, and kind personalities inspire children to work hard and behave appropriately. In addition, their speeches appeal to awareness among teenagers about live values, such as perseverance, love, and peace. Emma Watson is a prime example of an individual who works tirelessly because Emma never neglected her studies despite becoming a millionaire after her role in the “Harry Potter” franchise at a very young age. Besides, she holds a role on the board of directors of the Gucci fashion company and strives to become a social activist inspiring millions of young women worldwide.
In conclusion, even though there are celebrities who exert a negative influence on young people, there are many others who are exemplary to youngsters in the way they live their lives. It is crucial that children can differentiate between which celebrities to learn from.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, for example, i reckon, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45277777778 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96841774383 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605555555556 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.8400697786 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.214285714 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240913568047 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804397603449 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719535981353 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151403193797 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969420993278 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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