Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world How can the government ensure all these people can live together harmoniously

Nowadays, in parallel with globalisation is city expansion and opening policies that encourage international operations among nations. This condition can lead the residents to claim the government about social harmony and equity between natives and foreigners.
For starters, there are loads of demands which promote globalising a city. Firstly and most importantly, the demand for trading due to the fact that it is the era of worldwide corporations. Accordingly, the corporations that want to survive in this harsh trading world need to collaborate with foreign ones to exchange materials and products. Secondly, an essential request for integrating into both academic and vocational experiences. For example, teenagers in Vietnam learn a great amount of knowledge including language speaking skill only by conversing with foreigners on a street or a supermarket thanks to urbanisation.
Nevertheless, to help urbanisation maintains sustainable development, the government need to take serious action for social harmony. Specifically, domestic policies should insert some legislation in local cultural preservation which forbid foreigners to impede or blacken local traditions. Moreover, the local government should notice the visitors security, ensure that the act of depression and price overblown will be severely punished. Besides, there should be more educational campaigns for strengthening the inhabitants' belief and loyalty to their national customs.
In conclusion, the more popular urbanisation become, the more strict domestic policies should alter. The reasons for increasing cosmopolitan cities might be the demands for trading operations as well as educational transaction. Consequently, the local authorities need to add new regulations about cultural preservation as well as foreigner security.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'visitors'' or 'visitor's'?
Suggestion: visitors'; visitor's
... the local government should notice the visitors security, ensure that the act of depres...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'inhabitants'' or 'inhabitant's'?
Suggestion: inhabitants'; inhabitant's
...ational campaigns for strengthening the inhabitants belief and loyalty to their national cu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04651162791 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27424645718 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647286821705 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.6597401378 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.428571429 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0767961961825 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254504435991 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317775114603 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0529749033049 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038808314303 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.9 11.3001002004 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.81 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.89 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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