Nowadays, young people admire sports stars although they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is true that the youth admire outstanding athletics. Personally, I believe that admiration sports stars has both positive and negative consequences, as will now be discussed.
Admittedly, there are several advantages of being inspired by celebrities. Firstly, outstanding athletics often display extremely developed skills, which can help to spur young people towards a life full of physically active. In other words, adolescents attempt to imitate their idols, so they bury themselves in exercise which leads to a healthy lifestyle. For example, school children are often driven to exercise to desire to emulate sports stars such as Nadal, Messi or Ronaldo. Secondly, teenagers can also take valuable lessons from their idols’ mistakes. After Sharapova used doping, she had not abandon the game and come back with highly attempt in playing tennis.
Despite the positive impacts of admiring athletics, I believe that drawbacks are more significant. To begin with, since most adolescents are malleable, bad examples from sportsmen can develop moral issues in them. Many young people who look up to well-known figures such as Mike Tyson believe that they should pursue a glamorous, material life with parties and nightclubs. Furthermore, a good image of this occurred when Canadian runner Ben Johnson dishonorably lost an Olympic gold medal due to doping use. However, young people will be obsess with cheating can help them to reach high achievements.
In conclusion, I firmly hold the view that admiring outstanding athletics has more disadvantages than advantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 608, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'abandoned'.
Suggestion: abandoned
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 242.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52479338843 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87083040876 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.719008264463 0.561755894193 128% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7235809155 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.5 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202787018929 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584540505651 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496099876003 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111377535292 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497626758351 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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