One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

With the development of medical technology nowadays, the average age of people becomes older and people have more expectancy to life. People think this is why medical care improved. For me, I think it is a good trend and I want to talk about both of advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand, firstly, old people bring pressure for governments and hospitals. If they have high expectancy about their life, government have to spend more money on them such as sports facilities, health services and hospitals need more doctors and nurses to look after them. Secondly, not every family can afford the expenditure on medical care. If old people are paralytic, they need more care while their children need to work. So it also make their children under pressure. Thirdly, as I know, if old people get serious ill, some of they do not want to continue treating because they know it is meaningless for them, even if they have life expectancy.
On the other hand, first of all, it is true that almost everybody want to live longer without serious health problems so it is necessary for medical care to be improved. For example, if old people have a strong body, their children will not be much worry about them and they can even help their children to take care of their grandchildren. Additionally, if old people are healthy, they can also contribute to society. It’s very common that there are some old people keeping in order on the streets such us intersections in China.
In conclusion, longevity people do benefit from improved medical care, but we still have to long way to change the negative influence and make more old people in happiness.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80701754386 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61436239562 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540350877193 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1186856677 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8571428571 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7142857143 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238928681226 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938579735045 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758839676134 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173377331017 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804440029278 0.056905535591 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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