Parents of obese children should not be punished for making their children fat since the children fat problem is not only caused by parents and punishments cannot fix the problem effectively.
First of all, the phenomenon, that more and more youngsters are obese, do a tough challenge faced many countries. Except for parents, the government and big corporations shoulder their responsibilities as well. The government do not enact efficient laws or introduce attractive programs to raise the public health awareness. Companies promote junk food to from a bad public consuming habit for interests. For instance, KFC and McDonald's must be held at least partly responsible for super-sizing of juvenile waistlines. The American government did not control vegetable's price to encourage people to diet in a healthy way.
In addition, promoting parents to control their children's weight is to tutor and award them not punish them. What parents supposed to realize is overweight happened in their children would cost their more money. It is hard to figure out children's overweight problem caused by genes or their parents. Thus, utilizing awards to replace of punishments seem like a more reasonable way. The French government has set a good example, aiming to reduce the juvenile obese problem. Paris citizens are eligible to receive a public subsidy in the range of 200 francs if they buy healthy food.
In summary, all of parents, companies, and authorities created the problem should solve it together.Meanwhile, punishment cannot gain parents' appreciation and support to bring good results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...eir child fat is a good way. Firstly,I would like to talk about the parents th...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...elief that making their kids weighty is an better way to become healthy. So,guardi...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , guardians
...y is an better way to become healthy. So,guardians give their children more calories food ...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'calories'' or 'calorie's', 'calory's'?
Suggestion: calories'; calorie's; calory's
.... So,guardians give their children more calories food and food that contains more fat. L...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...nd food that contains more fat. Likewise,they also believe that it is also the best w...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recent research'.
Suggestion: Recent research
...ow that how healthy their children are. A recent research has shown that about 60 percentage of t...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...llusion that making their kids obese is an healthy way. Secondly,lets move to t...
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Suggestion: , lets
...ids obese is an healthy way. Secondly,lets move to the children who have this obes...
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Suggestion: , punishing
...s is down to their DNA. In conclusion,punishing parents would be a bad idea for making ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...r making their children fat. As a parent,they will always think positive for their ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99613899614 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79970439293 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552123552124 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9093902116 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4285714286 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412094923473 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154990075477 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122240429686 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282727547668 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105895609835 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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