In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Nowadays, more and more people from all social categories start to enjoy shopping and to consider it a relaxing activity. In my opinion, I strongly agree that regarding it as a hobby is a positive trend. And I am going to explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, shopping can improve people's mental health. When individuals are sad and they don't feel like going outside, just thinking about their favorite store can boost their feeling. Furthermore, looking at a new collection from a famous clothes shop , which was thought to attract individuals' attention, and imagining themselves wearing them increases their confidence. For example, a little girl that had a bad day at school can instantly shift her mood if her mother takes her to the mall and buy her a new dress.
In addition, the hobby of buying may improve the relationships with their family. Some fathers take their sons to the toy store in order to grow a stronger connection, without their child realizing it. Moreover, for some children, the action of buying has become a passion that motivates them to learn better. For instance, if his parents promise to take their kid to the Toy cars store if he gets a good grade, he will study harder for that exam. In other words , shopping has become a rewarding action for some human beings.
In conclusion, I think that shopping is a beneficial activity for individuals, boosting happiness, increasing their confidence,as well as building up strong family connections.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 92, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...alth. When individuals are sad and they dont feel like going outside, just thinking ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ew collection from a famous clothes shop , which was thought to attract individual...
^^
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... a passion that motivates them to learn better. For instance, if his parents promise t...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...udy harder for that exam. In other words , shopping has become a rewarding action ...
^^
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...g happiness, increasing their confidence,as well as building up strong family conne...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95634920635 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77937420112 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2601699786 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0769230769 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2307692308 7.06120827912 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10407146292 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435372658095 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533891775671 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718822354356 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453052232231 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 92, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...alth. When individuals are sad and they dont feel like going outside, just thinking ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ew collection from a famous clothes shop , which was thought to attract individual...
^^
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... a passion that motivates them to learn better. For instance, if his parents promise t...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...udy harder for that exam. In other words , shopping has become a rewarding action ...
^^
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...g happiness, increasing their confidence,as well as building up strong family conne...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95634920635 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77937420112 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2601699786 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0769230769 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2307692308 7.06120827912 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10407146292 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435372658095 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533891775671 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718822354356 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453052232231 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.