In the past sports champions used to be motivated by the desire to win a match or to break world records These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous What message does this send to young people and how do

There is a general perception that earlier athletes used to be motivated by the desire for victory or outstanding achievements while modern sports players overlook these core values and prioritize other things, namely stardom and richness. However, this change in motivation engenders a negative impact on the young generation and even sports itself, on which this following essay will expound.
To commence with, many modern football or basketball stars are receiving high incomes and popularity. Accordingly, most abandon their initial goals and lead an extravagant, unhealthy lifestyle, which in turn weakens their health and senses. Consequently, they start to lose discipline, face failures and end their careers. Furthermore, some players who succumb to the temptation of monetary gains and fame will seek illegal means of winning the match such as the use of banned substances, or bribery. All of these things will convey the wrong messages to everyone, not only making them believe that professional sports is a world running on money and fame but also changing their approach to sports and sports’ former values.
It is evident that the shift in the aim of professional athletes also modifies the structure of the sports industry. Recently, sports leagues have become commercialized with the transfer of players and different forms of advertisements. Meanwhile, businesses often take advantage of sporting events to popularize their images. Take the Euro Cup 2021 as an example, FIFA received billions of dollars in sponsorship from Coca-Cola, an international company, to afford the organizational cost of this tournament. When the cup was taking place, exclusive advertisements and images of the company were seen by audiences from all over the world, simultaneously raising the company’s popularity and its stock price in the market. This underscores the belief that professional sports have been industrialized to match the contemporary goals of sports players.
In conclusion, the shift in sportsmen’s attitudes has sent inappropriate messages to the younger generation and changed the sports’ nature as well. Concerning this situation, it is everyone’s responsibility to have the right approach to sports to retain their true values in our life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...etes also modifies the structure of the sports industry. Recently, sports leagues have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57060518732 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1016866806 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631123919308 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1412063203 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.866666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180236351425 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514611938354 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478213120223 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107941625959 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597406961703 0.056905535591 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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