Young people in contemporary societies are exposed to a negative lifestyle associated with illegal substances and drugs mainly due to the lack of good role models. There are a lot of contributing factors to this behavior, however, in my opinion, the most important is the absence of good interaction between parents and their children.
It is a fact well known that, nowadays, young folk are not influenced anymore by their parents, which, as a consequence, leads them to an unhealthy narrative of bad examples. This happens because parents either do not pay enough attention to their offspring as they grow up, or they become indulgent and far to lenient with their kids by accepting, for instance, their every request. This type of parenting quickly grants to children control and they, subsequently, stop respecting their parents and start to seek influence elsewhere. The TV and the social media fill in this gap by introducing to young people all sorts of bad attitude, such as that doing drugs is a socially acceptable behavior.
The only way to tackle this problem is to educate children from a very young age, and to present them the true values, which are highly regarded by our society. In order for this to happen, parents paly a pivotal role. They are responsible for explaining to their children the negative impact that drugs and any other illegal substance can have to their bodies, and how to avoid any bad influence. Furthermore, the educational system of every country must prioritize the correct induction of young folk to the society. For example, in Sweden, children from a very young age work four hours per week by offering their services to the community. Through this procedure, they learn to appreciate values, such as honesty and collective spirit, instead of the alcohol and drugs depicted in TV series.
In conclusion, I believe that the only way for stopping the tendency of young folk toward drugs is by presenting them constantly with healthy examples and role models.
- The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities Derby and Nottingham Between 2000 and 2009 78
- Rich countries often give money to poorer countries but it does not solve poverty Therefore developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid To what extent do you agree or disagree 47
- In some countries people spend long hours at work Why does this happen Is it positive or negative development 78
- Some people think that instead of preventing climate change we need to find a way to live with it To what extent do you agree 89
- Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment only governments and large companies can make a difference To what extent do you agree or disagree 84
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02395209581 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70610986206 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565868263473 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.0809714263 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.076923077 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139360392894 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525532208643 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432149416701 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943741148755 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191877341468 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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