People are living longer. Some people think that it causes big problems. Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and for society in general. Discuss both views & give your own opinion
Many people think that longevity makes major issues. Whereas, some others argue that old age peoples could help to develop business, and gave many ideas to the public welfare. In my opinion, I believe that, having aged members in society may help to improve the infrastructure of community as well as the development of commercial industries in many ways.
On the one hand, many believe that, ageing population makes problems like, health issues and psychological disorders. For example, Alzheimer's disease and dementia are mainly affecting the people over 60 to 70 yrs. Moreover,other diseases like, arthritis, respiratory problems, and heart diseases are also affecting aged people too. So as to believers of this aspect are right in somehow.
On the other hand, there are obvious positive results those who have aged instructors and guiders to pop up their business and society development even if health issues affects too. Many companies are searching to the well experienced person to enhance their growth and development. Life through experience is different than the one who achieve by the books and theories. So that, some people believe longevity is not a problem.
However, in my opinion, people live longer is good for the society as per the developmental criteria by means of long lasting experience in business. furthermore for the society including families grand parents would give the proper guidance to the younger ones even though they are suffering health problems.
In conclusion,having aged people in society might have hospitalized or bed ridden, the instructions and path way they gave to the world is not forgotten.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, as to, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30916030534 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88644770046 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603053435115 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8342796158 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3571428571 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29096427073 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945540473298 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687400164682 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152584352616 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685871162072 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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