The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20 % in the last ten years. Discuss causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
In modern times, the issue of increasing number of obese child has become highly controversial in western country. The causes of this phenomenon are varied and have led to wide range of effects on human life. I will outline in this essay why is occurring and discuss the impacts it can have on people and society.
Generally speaking, there are two mains why children in western country are becoming obese. The primary cause of this trend is bad eating habit. This is due to enormous fast-food consumption, which has resulted in take high calorie in theirs meal. Secondly, overweighting can also be negatively effected by car usage in daily routine. If people use car instead of walking to nearby place they can quickly gain weight due to not making exercise like walking.
The result of being obese are numerous and potentially serious for human health. Perhaps the most serious consequence is that children, who are obese, may have serious disease. If these children eat always something, theirs hormones like insulin may not work very well and resulted in pancreas cancer. A second consequence is that overweighting can be effect of theirs social health and mental health. For example, if they are over put up weight according to the peers, they can have difficulty making a friend and they feel lonely and depressive.
In conclusion, increasing number of children who are obese is an issue, which will continue to demand our attention and foreseeable future. If governments and families chose to ignore this issue, the future of children and society will be in danger.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'eat'.
Suggestion: always eat
...have serious disease. If these children eat always something, theirs hormones like insulin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd and they feel lonely and depressive. In conclusion, increasing number of chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02281368821 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61449357068 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593155893536 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.7410544073 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.0666666667 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191851930357 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643396387093 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467514149589 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117884474205 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411198883525 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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