The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
An increasing concern for many people around the world is that kids are gain lots of weight, which can lead them to certainly physical and mental issues. The proportion of overweight children has grown up by near to fifth in the last two decades. This essay will outline why overweight is occurring, and discuss the results it can have on the society.
General speaking, there two reasons why children become fat. The primary cause of this pandemic is spreading of the produced food that contain sugar and fat such as juice and chips. That’s because the human body can not completely solve these kind of components and store it on it. Secondly, it has proven that the improvement that entertainment recently witnessed play a fundamental role in make kids lazy and then becoming fat. The kids used to play out in movement games whereas now they are only playing in their screens.
The results of obesity are numerous and potentially serious. It has been shown that obesity can lead to dangerous diseases as well as mental issues. The immunity system of a fat person can be weaken because the heart can not do his full job in stimulate the white blood cells. In addition the peers can make fun and bullying on their overweight friend, which can result in make that kind being lonely.
In conclusion, obesity in kids is a topic which very relevant to modern society. However , I believe that the best solution is to educate parents about the risks of this trend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74117647059 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44457294627 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2460444611 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.3571428571 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104716492669 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364393532387 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455767409816 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663114010541 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492196579387 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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