The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
Over the past 10 years, western countries have recorded an upward trend, standing at approximately a fifth in obesity among adolescents. Due to the fact that our society is becoming more and more sufficient, and our lives are meeting the demand for every aspect of materials. This essay will shed light on more details about the reasons why this occurred and examine the consequences of the worrying trend.
The overweight status may spring from the fact that students nowadays have to attend a myriad of lessons both online and offline to live up to their parent's expectations. It is apparent that the more prospective our society is, the more pupils have been put an enormous strain in order to achieve a dream job in a competitive future market. As a result, they do not have enough spare time to enjoy themselves as well as engage in physical activities to keep fit. Moreover, with the popularity of junk food, it seems that teenagers pay much attention to this kind of food because of its convenience and time-saving. The youth is now living in the hectic pace of life, lacking time to prepare a nutritious meal, thereby consuming fast food from MacDonald’s, Kentucky Fried Chicken and Pizza Hut is an ideal option for them. In the long run, they will get into unhealthy eating habits with unbalanced diets, leading to overweighting.
An increase in the number of obesity children makes them suffer several serious adverse effects. Firstly, this will have a negative impact on their health. Because of taking in excessively ready-made meals, they may get stuck in health-related diseases, especially diabetes. By that I mean, a child has to be rejected with insulin for the rest of their life. Even worse, this is one of the primary factors causing the premature death due to heart attack. Not only this, overweight children often experience bullying from other childre, which known as body shaming phenomenon. Consequently, it may affect on their mental health. Gradually, children are self-conscious about their appearance, and hide in their shell, leading to psychology issues such as depression, and overthinking.
To sum up, there are many reasons of obesity amongst children, and a variety of negative effects both on physical health and mental problems. Therefore, society must guarantee steps are taken to prevent this problem from deterioting future.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 598, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...haming phenomenon. Consequently, it may affect on their mental health. Gradually, childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, i mean, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10796915167 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80088416784 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622107969152 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.022591331 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.578947368 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14034664161 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392105750896 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346885992182 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869604576266 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316585768448 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 598, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...haming phenomenon. Consequently, it may affect on their mental health. Gradually, childre...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, i mean, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10796915167 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80088416784 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622107969152 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.022591331 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.578947368 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14034664161 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392105750896 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346885992182 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869604576266 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316585768448 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.