The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
In the contemporary world, personal information and data is a publicized and widely concerned issue. While it is true that these private materials should be kept by large internet cooperation and enterprises, I would argue that the downsides of it are far outweighing the merit.
On the one hand, several individuals think that personal materials should belong to companies’ ownership due to numerous reasons. Firstly, this could help enterprise owners manage their staff efficiently as well as trace their background if necessary. Therefore, every applicant has to send their CVs which include everything about themselves to the HR department when first joining any organization. Another cause for this is the issue regarding to education and training qualification of employees. It is common knowledge that each position has its own criteria and career requirements for applicants, which means that their background information should be held to considered thoroughly before officially accepted to that job. Once they are turned down for that position or no longer work for that company, these personal data, of course, be given back to that person.
On the other hand, I strongly contend that personal information should be kept in secret. Firstly, not all citizens prefer their personal contact details or family background widespread online. This means that almost virtual Internet users can access their secured data, which is potential harm to themselves and their families. Several online fraudulent appropriations of assets happen due to the endless information posed on Internet platforms, remaining a huge amount of debt. Furthermore, once contact numbers or emails are revealed online, many owners of those are threatened by trash calls and messages, which causes constant stress and uncomfortable to them. For instance, illegal banks or credit funds make hundreds of calls on a daily basis despite being blocked, which is not only a source of tension but also a way of persuading underprivileged people to borrow money from them with the huge interest trade.
Over the past decade, the fact that personal materials appear widespread online is a hot debate and gets a critical concern. While some people think that this phenomenon holds a great variety of benefits, I firmly believe that the downturn is far more dominating.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, of course, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38692098093 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87764737464 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613079019074 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3255005612 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5625 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187429972203 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571592044717 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378146165955 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10847488914 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246482279376 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.