Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. do you agree or disagree?

Today for the time being this is an undeniable fact that the knock on technology on the life of humans can be profound. One group of individuals put forward an argument that technology is a reason of disparity between rich and poor, on the other hand other group of people criticize this opinion. In my essay I am going to discuss both views which must be address accordingly.
As it commonly known that technology is a marker status of globalized world which, in this this turn, opens opportunity for everybody to get profound knowledge and scope of experience. For example in comparison with last century, nowadays it is acceptable for everybody to get bachelor degree at world-prominent universities such as Cambridge, Oxford etc. without visiting them. In addition internet provides equal access for everybody to wide range of information. As a result that is obvious that online shopping, e-learning and social networking achievable for both poor and rich people and reduce the gap between social levels.
But as everything, the negative sides of modernization are not excepted. For instance, new invented robotic hands used by most of car making companies replaced an array of human labor and as a result of this thousands left without work, in contrast this companies increased in their incomes. Moreover, most of vital medicines and medical procedures such as open heart surgery or kidney transplantation costs over thousands of dollars which is unreachable for poor and became the reason of their death. As a consequence that is evident that technology is a layer between social levels of human.
In conclusion taking into an account both sets of argument it should be considered that technology decorates our world and makes it more globalized and acceptable.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: this
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
..., Oxford etc. without visiting them. In addition internet provides equal access for ever...
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r and became the reason of their death. As a consequence that is evident that tech...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13494809689 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92302151696 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598615916955 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0602625109 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.153846154 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0451161138454 0.244688304435 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0211249305668 0.084324248473 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342055228131 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0343988229167 0.151304729494 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287406136607 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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