Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for
any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
Learning a musical instrument often requires a long duration time. Thus, it could be a great achievement when children are able playing the instrument. I personally do entirely agree with this view, which I will explain below
On the one hand, I do appreciate that some people think differently saying that playing a musical instrument has more significant benefits. Such as improving children patience and perseverance. Mastering certain musical instrument requires a struggle through hours, months, and sometimes years of practice. For example, learning a piano instrument often spend at least four years of practice in general. Secondly, It seems to me that children's academic skills might improve as well. This is because they not only learn a music but also they learn a physics subject. For instance, playing non-string instruments, such as drums and vibraphone which provide opportunities for children to explore what are the scientific principles on the instrument. Furthermore, I believe that another benefit of playing instruments could foster open-mindedness about culture. Where children are given opportunities learning and playing a variety of music from all over the place, such as learning Jazz instrument, they might also learn the music background.
Looking for another perspective, it might be said that playing a musical instrument gives fewer benefits, this is due to children, in the future, have often a career that would be far different from music. However, having a talent to play musical instrument could help children determine their future occupation.
To conclude, I believe that playing musical instrument is beneficial, not only for children development but also for future career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 549, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...only learn a music but also they learn a physics subject. For instance, playing n...
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Line 2, column 981, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to jazz'
Suggestion: To jazz
...om all over the place, such as learning Jazz instrument, they might also learn the m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50378787879 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98094027711 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8830692342 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.785714286 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251134139397 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091148917625 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625513345754 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171206025113 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534014922105 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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