It is true that the question whether pop stars or classical music performers can make more fortune remains a source of controversy in the music field. While I accept that pop stars can earn much. However I would argue that classical music can also make a lot of money for some of the following reasons.
Firstly singers can earn money or not depends on their talents such as beautiful voice and their ability to perform on stage. For example, Mi Tam - a famous Vietnamese Pop star - whose talents stand out from other singers with a good voice, is also a gratefully dancer. In addition, she is very friendly with her fans which makes her popular all over the country. Moreover, she also has chances to perform live shows oversea. The more shows she takes part in the more money she can make. Besides, Tran Tien is one of the successful musicians and singers in classical music. He is known for his ability to compose music and sing very well, which makes him special. His fans are keen on his songs and his voice. He has been invited to perform in many big music occasions. The money that he earns is not less than any other famous pop stars.
Secondly, luck is another factor that helps singers in any kinds of music become famous. If a singer is lucky enough to have a song hit, he/ she will become famous in no time. Or when that singer takes part in a music contest, he/ she attracts big music companies and are invited to work for them. In exchange, he/ she will be provided with money, shows. His/ her name will be on advertisement and become popular in one night. Those singers will be able to earn a fortune regardless of whatever kinds of music they belong to.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
It is true that the question whether pop stars or classical music performers...
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Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...urce of controversy in the music field. While I accept that pop stars can earn much. ...
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Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... I accept that pop stars can earn much. However I would argue that classical music can ...
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Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... music can also make a lot of money for some of the following reasons. Firstly singers can...
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Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gratefully') instead an adjective, or a noun ('dancer') instead of another adjective.
...ther singers with a good voice, is also a gratefully dancer. In addition, she is very friendly with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in addition, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46405228758 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22500926221 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532679738562 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4001020555 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.8947368421 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1052631579 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213209205665 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073894897199 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744319875809 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171974765778 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954734200443 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.0946893788 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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