At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Nowadays, there are some countries with a large proportion of young people, by contrary, the number of elderly is relatively much less. In my opinion, having more young adults is advantageous for countries developing, such as boosting economy and creating new things.
On the one hand, countries with high percent of young adults may experience various problems. Firstly, if a large number of young students graduate from universities at the same time, this will lead to an intense competition for jobs. The oversupply of labor may result in higher rate of unemployment and poverty; furthermore, the living standards will fall down. Secondly, if the government cannot meet the demand for the provision of housing and public services, crime rate will increase gradually. Finally, working environment might be worse than before, since some employers realize that they can exploit their employees and bring their salary down.
On the other hand, young adults also bring plenty of advantages to countries. They are energetic and creative in different areas such as science, technology, art and so on. Young adults in modern society try their best to invent new devices and think over various methods to make life much easier. Besides, the more young adults the countries have, the more labor they can use. Take China for example, the number of their population is around 1300 million; therefore, lots of people can devote themselves to manufacture industries. This result in boosting their national economy and affecting their future economic developing; moreover, they also become one of the economic powers in the world.
In conclusion, the advantages of higher population of young adults overweight the disadvantages. Young adults not only boost economic development but also bring energy to society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...xperience various problems. Firstly, if a large number of young students graduate from universiti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4014084507 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71831670071 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595070422535 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1571778889 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.266666667 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9333333333 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218498958503 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758078677482 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983077540729 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149059015681 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852681177262 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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