At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people

In recent years, a youthful population has become the situation in some countries, where the number of young people is higher than the number of old people. In my opinion, an increase in the young population will have a detrimental effect on social aspects.
On the one hand, if a country has more young adults than old people, the economy may be lifted by an abundant labor force. People who are economically active can participate in the manufacturing process and help increase average productivity. This will contribute to attracting international companies to invest in producing systems to outsource their work to third countries, which enhances economic development. For example, as the young Vietnamese population has grown, many foreign-invested factories have been built in the country to take advantage of low production and labor costs.
Despite the demographic dividend that a young population brings, this situation could become a medical burden, especially in developing countries. Young people in these nations have to live in squalid conditions, which is a catalyst for disease outbreaks. The rise in the number of adults of childbearing age is also linked to an increase in the rate of abortion among the young. These two factors simultaneously place the medical system under the pressure of overloading patients. In addition, if young people lack knowledge and working skills, it is difficult for them to have decent jobs and escape poverty. This will lead to an alarming increase in the number of youth offenders committing crimes to earn a living. For instance, a large number of young African criminals have spent their lives in prison because they only have basic knowledge and find it hard to seek a job to pay for their utilities, so they can do nothing but commit a crime to afford their lives. Thus, a lopsided population that includes more young adults may cause medical and social problems.
In conclusion, having a huge number of young people may improve the development of the economy; however, I strongly believe that this situation will put an invisible pressure on the healthcare system and society. 
 

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 733, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... crimes to earn a living. For instance, a large number of young African criminals have spent thei...
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Line 4, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re on the healthcare system and society.   
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, third, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15804597701 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89998627566 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9086931408 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249597601456 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086994625436 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643614087923 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162671622042 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598016771939 0.056905535591 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 733, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... crimes to earn a living. For instance, a large number of young African criminals have spent thei...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re on the healthcare system and society.   
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, third, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15804597701 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89998627566 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9086931408 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249597601456 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086994625436 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643614087923 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162671622042 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598016771939 0.056905535591 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.