At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
For most people, when they get their first job they have little
idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation
throughout their working life. if they decide to change, they
need to consider how this will impact on their career overall.
People who stay with the same organisation have the
advantage ol thoroughly understanding how it works and also becoming familiar with the staff and processes. if they
work hard, their promotion prospects are good and there is
likely to be greater job security, with the promise of a good
pension when they retire. employers value loyalty and may
offer additional incentives to long-term employees, including
bonuses and reward schemes.
However, one of the drawbacks of staying with the same
organisation is that the person may get stuck doing the same
job year after year. In some cases, this can lead to boredom
and disillusionment. Moving from one organisation to another
can be a strategic decision in order to have variety and acquire
a range of skills and experience. A friend of my father started
out as a sociology teacher, he then joined the Social Services
and is currently managing a care home in Western Australia.
this has made him incredibly knowledgeable in a range of
related fields and, in my view, has provided him with a much
more interesting working life.
Although there are benefits to working lor one organisation,
I feel that it is also valuable for an employee to be able to
offer a wide range of experience having worked for different
companies. As long as it is planned carefully, I feel that change is
good and will ultimately benefit the employee and the employer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 6, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... their first job they have little idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisati...
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Suggestion: If
...isation throughout their working life. if they decide to change, they need to co...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... familiar with the staff and processes. if they work hard, their promotion prospe...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Employers
...se of a good pension when they retire. employers value loyalty and may offer additional...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ging a care home in Western Australia. this has made him incredibly knowledgeable i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, then, i feel, in my view, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03558718861 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79152404192 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5871886121 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5107777024 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.916666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.38176352705 616% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0773107729446 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313236704227 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342906447246 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0192174216386 0.151304729494 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268905760964 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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