At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In more era, many countries have their population rate consisting the majority of young people compared to those of elder. this situation will boost their economic development and ease the burden of social welfare. however, some significant backward points should be considered carefully. this essay will analyze both views of this argument before offering a reasoned conclusion.
firstly, it is virtually impossible to deny that the young people play important roles in economic development due to the dynamic and creativity the contribute to the community. currently, technology is the main key to approach success. this gives young generation chances to use their energy to break through any limitations that were set. for instance, a noticeable development of chinese technology companies positions the country as one of the most powerful nations in nearly decades. the young people really make technological revolutions. the higher percentage of their productive workforce it is, the more gross domestic products it may guarantee.
furthermore, young people are not only more productive but also healthier. they live in their brightest ages without any concerns about their health status. this workforce usually requires less healthcare services than the elder. it contributes vastly to national budget.
on the other hand, many amongst the young people generation create burdens for educational system. they are at risk of unemployment rate. the more crowded the workforce is, the more demanding it is in generating enough employment opportunities to meet all requirements. unemployment can also lead to the rising of crime rate.
to conclude, i firmly believe that the advantages of having a large ratio of young people outweigh the disadvantages by their massive impacts on economic development. however, the goverment has to concern about having the right political movements to mix between young and old citizens in order to keep the proper balance in the community.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, as to, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41447368421 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86321806003 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608552631579 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 304.0 20.2975951904 1498% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1646.0 106.682146367 1543% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 304.0 20.7667163134 1464% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 108.0 7.06120827912 1529% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174886204693 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174886204693 0.084324248473 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944329294327 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428718442271 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 156.1 13.0946893788 1192% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -254.0 50.2224549098 -506% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 124.2 11.3001002004 1099% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.58 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 23.49 8.58950901804 273% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 65.0 9.78957915832 664% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 123.6 10.1190380762 1221% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 124.0 10.7795591182 1150% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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