At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In the modern world, the old population is one of the major concerns that national authorities are making efforts to overcome its difficulties. In some countries, the number of young adults contributes principly to the population, which is larger when comparing that of the elderly. Although drawbacks are unavoidable, in my perspective, i believe that there are further more advantages that significantly outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one hand, there is an obvious reason why people support that this trend can lead to negative consequences. It has been proven that teenagers above 18 years old can make decisions quickly, but mostly depend on their emotions. The case can be serious when that age group is controlled by the power of money and impacts from negative parts of the society. As a result, 19-year-old teenagers possibly become criminals such as thieves, burglars or hackers. However, in my opinion, these problematic situations can be solved beforehand by providing adequate rules, regulations and especially education.
On the other hand, I wholeheartedly support that population containing massive young adults leads to several advantages. To begin, the economy is greatly benefited from this trend. Large quantities of youngsters provide a sustainable workforce. The reason for this is that technology is developing faster and wider than ever before. It is necessary to require employees with sufficient knowledge and skills to maintain and ultimately improve qualities, quantities of the products and the technology as well. Moreover, the huge population proportion contributed by citizens between 19 and 20 obviously enhances the living standards of the whole country in general. According to research, young adults are the most ambitious part of the society, they are full of innovations and ambitions. When their needs can be met, they will make efforts to achieve their dreams, hopes and targets. Research also found that the majority of voluntary works such as raising fund and helping the elderly are mostly participated by young adults.
In conclusion, although there are disadvantages of large quantities of 19-year-old people in the population, i believe that the benefits are obviously more significant than drawbacks. All in all, it is important for national authorities and individuals to consider carefully, not to minimize the importance of old people alongside avoiding polarising influences of youngsters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53333333333 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08791018868 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.896357426 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.210526316 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172742286079 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045346379799 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459142212487 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979809629109 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537053365882 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.