In the modern time, there are some countries around the world have more young people than older people in their demographic. I believe the benefits of this situation outweigh the drawbacks.
On the one hand, there are several merits of having more adults who have not reach retirement age. Firstly, it will increase the economy of those countries. Many young adults are still able to work since their physical health has not detiriorate due to old age yet, which means they can work to generate incomes for themselves and pay taxes. As a result, their country economy will rise. Secondly, young people are more capable to defend their country than the elder. Young adults physical ability are much more than older people in catagories such as strength, endurance, and vigor. Military has a strict training routine to increase and reinforce those capabilities that the elder might not be suitable. Thus, older people are not fit to be the frontline of their country defend. For instance, military commonly recruit people from the age of 20 to 35 and avoid the age of 40, this is because humans physical capabilities have detiriorated a lot after the age of 35.
On the other hand, with the aforementioned advantages, there is a disadvantage for having more young adults. They are not as experience as older people. Many of young peole after finishing their degrees or certificates from their respective university or vocational school, and started working in lower division of an organization or a company. This is because they have not work in a real environment that required many years of experience. Hence, many companies have to train them so that they are fit for the job which cost some of the company resources to do.
In conclusion, I would argue that it will more beneficial to have more young people than older people.
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Suggestion: reached
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Suggestion:
...detiriorated a lot after the age of 35. On the other hand, with the aforemention...
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...hat they are fit for the job which cost some of the company resources to do. In conclusion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91612903226 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63247152835 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512903225806 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9117550753 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6470588235 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162345567802 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058069305978 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461357875203 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115807728488 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582178930426 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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