With the pressure on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: P.E and cookery) should be removed from syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In our society today, there is a popular stereotype that students who score high grades in academic are more likely to be successful in future career. Therefore, some people believe that non-academic subjects having no value to the intellect of child’s mind should be eliminated from school curriculum. Personally, I totally disagree with their point of view.
The first reason of this is because non-academic activities like dance, cookery or P.E no longer cause stress but provide relaxation to the pupils. Moreover, these genres of subjects bring students a whale of time and an opportunity to refresh themselves and then overcome the performance pressure imposed by parents and teachers. According to recent research, scientists said that vocational subjects at school had a considerable contribution in improving concentration of children on academic ones.
In addition, I also think that practical subjects will open up a new path for the future career of student. It stands to reason that not all students are academically brilliant. For example, instead of being good at Math or Literature, they have special talent in areas such as singing or dancing. By encouraging student to engage in non-academic subjects, school can bring out their hidden ability as well as giving facilities for them to pursue their interests. After all, besides a doctor or scientists graduating with flying colors, our society also needs athletes, writers, chefs to function effectively.
In conclusion, there is no point in removing non-academic subjects from school curriculum. Instead, I believe that school should designate these subject as optional items so that student can pursue career in a field of their choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, after all, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41791044776 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94866791269 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641791044776 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6832014118 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.692307692 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366332743592 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123142863773 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0965949423316 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233784918479 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695727243462 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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