The advancement in medical care has brought much benefits for men and women in term of improving the quality of their lives and increase the average life expectancy. Although most of the changes could be considered as positive development, some issues still remain within the ageing population which I will explain in the following essay.
Nowaday, people live healthier and happier life as a result of advances in medical care. The average age of people is gradually increase in the course of fifty years together with the quality of life. For example, my granfather died in the age of sixty due to severe infectious disease. This type of illness could be prevented these day thank to the improvement in hygiene and better health care. Preventative dianosis with personalized medicine also play a role in breaking the age barrier and help people live their lives in the most convienient way.
But all the advancement in medical care as well as tecnological breakthrough also bring up issues that needed to be deal with. One of the disadvantages could be new disease in ageing population such as neurodegenerative diease or cognitive decline. Alzheimer's and Parkinson's diease is the two common illness that affect most of senior citizens in the age over sixties. These diseases targeted neurons in the brain and broke the connection between them, leading to the loss of motor function, neuronal damages and cognitive decrement. Therefore, even though people living a longer life, they are also suffering from the disability caused by the disease.
Overall, the advances in mediacal care has brought much of possitive development, issues still remain in the ageing population such as the introduction of new diesase that affect their well-being.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...advancement in medical care has brought much benefits for men and women in term of i...
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Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
...This type of illness could be prevented these day thank to the improvement in hygiene and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19787985866 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84658310491 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565371024735 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7719392163 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.153846154 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267090041557 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943324742562 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665055745987 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164576459883 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757534992633 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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