School should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Subjects such as music and sports are not useful.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that teaching academic subjects should be the principal aproach of schools to prepare students for better jobs in their future, while alternative subjects such as music and sports are considered as wasting time. Personally, I think that both types of subjects could be practical, and I therefore disagree with the statement that music and sports are not useful subjects.
On the one hand, alternative courses could sometimes be helpful for future careers. For example, learning how to sing or play a musical instrument could bring benefits for students in networking events or having job promotions. My cousin once told me about his experience when he got a promotion as a marketing manager for his talent and bravery because he volunteered to perform a show at his company event for clients. Another course that I find helpful and essential is sports. In my opinion, sports could bring benefits to students because they help them to improve their strength to work under pressure or they could expand their professional network by playing sports with their colleagues or partners.
On the other hand, schools should teach students academic subjects because they will help them to pursue their dreams on professional area. If students want to be scientists or biologists, they need to have basic knowledge of academic subjects such as mathematics, geography, biology, which should be taught at school before enrolling in universities or going to work. In my case, it took me around one year to study basic knowledge of Probality and Mathematical Statistics at highschool for pursuing my dream job as a Maket Researcher at university.
In conclusion, academic subjects are essential for students, but subjects such as music and sports could be equally practical and helpful for different circumstances.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27397260274 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83995598062 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565068493151 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.2034734028 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.90909090909 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375207375951 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153082500912 0.084324248473 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112832387614 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264529700134 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955223908641 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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