Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is a controversial debate surrounding the subject that schools put in their curriculum. These days, schools mainly allocate their time to teach conventional like history and so on. On the flip side, people persistently claim that schools should teach the subjects that ease the process of securing job. To me, the idea of the latter party seems more appealing since it would substantially benefit both individuals regarding financial supports and society.

On the one hand, when it comes to financial problems, everyone firmly claim that by having a well-paid job people could readily overcome obstacles. Although there are a large number of graduates even those who have high scores, they could not find a satisfactory job immediately after they have finished their school. For example, according to the recent survey of X University, 60 percent of the graduates could not find a job no matter whether it is relevant or relevant to their field of study. So, it would be wise if schools teach practical skills that would contribute to convenience in order to find a fulfilled job.

On the other hand, getting adequate expert in the prominent careers is another vital factor that plays an immense rule in societies. It is often said by scholars, as long as students in the society are aware of the bright perspective of the subject that they are studying, they would enthusiastically unify their efforts to improve in their subjects. Hence, communities would definitely be beneficiary with regard to abundant of adept expert in the majors that are more spread throughout the societies. For instance, a research conducted by X Municipality manifestly revealed some facts. It illustrated states that had urged their schools teach students subject that are more lucrative and prosperous during last decades now benefit better economy condition in comparison with others.

To sum up, in my point of view, it would be distinctively wise if government urge schools arrange a curriculum that encompasses majors that lead to better condition for both society with respect to possessing sufficient expert and individuals regarding finding lucrative job.

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Average: 9.5 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... overcome obstacles. Although there are a large number of graduates even those who have high scor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, regarding, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, to sum up, with regard to, with respect to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29275362319 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85650078302 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573913043478 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5349444666 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.428571429 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214108846575 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729954212305 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509525953084 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123928891521 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549435066098 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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