Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.
What do you think is the reason for this?
Is this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, Millennial and Generation Z adults around the world do shopping as one of the most popular forms of leisure activity. In this essay, I would like to explain the causes of this phenomenon and tell my opinion about it.
It is evident that advertisements are developing and spreading everywhere. Many platforms, such as YouTube, Instagram, and Facebook, are the place for any advertised items. In Indonesia, my country, young adults will find the endorsements because they use social media more frequently than older adults. This behavior makes a lot of young adults buy anything they want as a form of relaxation. Furthermore, most activities such as studying and working are stressful for new adults. My sister is a perfect example of someone who thinks she must go to mall to refresh herself through shopping after finishing her studies and jobs.
However, the impacts of excessive shopping would be detrimental in the future. Firstly, the mentality of Millennial and Generation Z adults will be negative. They will become persons who spend a lot of money for buying unnecessary things. My friends always buy new products of iPhones even though the previous version of this smartphones can still be used by them. Moreover, most young adults potentially do not have money management skills because of their behavior that love shopping, and they will likely have difficulty in their old age due to a lack of money management. It happens to some people from previous generation such as my father although they are not from the same era as young adults. That is why my father lives in poverty now.
In general, young people tend to shop because they need relaxation after completing tasks in their offices or colleges. However, they must be aware the negative impacts of this activity because it will make them have consumerism habit, and most likely bring them to live in poverty.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02222222222 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70033544943 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574603174603 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5286483984 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0588235294 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274205218631 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809215871435 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590308462088 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177467283598 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662436328803 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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