With the development of technology, there is a transition within the way in which information is disseminated. Some people assert that the rise of various social media contributes to some problems such as fake news and cyber fraud, while others do not agree. From my perspective, the development of social media is conducive to a betterment of our society because the advantages of this trend far outweigh the disadvantages.
Undeniably, there are several drawbacks to using social media. The most immediate one is a strong bias against a particular issue. While social media provides people with a platform where they can freely express their unique perspectives or experiences, it is easier for them to isolate themselves from the general ideas. That is, people might become more opinionated and the messages they convey are less than objective. Second, the authenticity of information posted by social media should be called into question. Due to the fact that everyone can serve as a journalist just through their social network platforms freely, it is always the case that no one can actually confirm whether or not the information they released are correct and high-quality. Nevertheless, the above problems do not necessarily mean that we should avoid social media.
In fact, humans get several unprecedented benefits from social media. First and foremost, the popularity of social media ushers in an era of information explosion which allows us to have a better connection with this world. People can always personally publish their news on social media without any government approval and censorship. Despite the fact that fake news and opinionated ideas abound in the social network, traditional media such as TV broadcasts and newspapers do not necessarily offer accurate and authentic information because governments also control what the public should know. Moreover, social media gives us the ability to quickly get a huge amount of information all over the world. The ability to get information is almost important for every walk of life, especially for business people. For instance, a company could gain an opportunity to take an excess profit margin, if they find a manufacturer who provides a lower price on production or a group of consumers with higher demand.
In conclusion, both of the two views have their pros and cons, but still, I maintain that we should keep the diversity of social media, as the new communication tool has profound impacts on every aspect of people’s lives.
- Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). 89
- Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes for example working for a charity improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children To what exatent do you agree or disagree 93
- Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use Do you think it is a positive or negative development 95
- All the people in a company should be treated equally and provided with the same number of holidays in a year or people doing different jobs enjoy different amount of holiday time To what extent do you agree or disagree 95
- Some countries achieve international sports by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use Do you think this is positive or negative development 95
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 680, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...e case that no one can actually confirm whether or not the information they released are corre...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'can'.
Suggestion: always can
...tter connection with this world. People can always personally publish their news on social...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21287128713 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90789230595 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571782178218 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4604339866 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342965498636 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109044441338 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720492998485 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200402959836 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268071486826 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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