In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
In this modern society, health and fitness are always among the most crucial aspects of life which should be carefully taken into consideration. However, despite the significant advancements in technology and medicine, the average weight of people have a tendency to rise and their health, as a result, gets worse than it used to be in the past. This essay will outline some reasons for this and propose some possible solutions.
To begin with, the modern lifestyle definitely has something to do with the increasing popularity of obesity. In simpler terms, people are likely to spend more hours sitting in an office and doing paperwork rather than trying some energetic and activities. As a consequence, they get lazier and lazier and never try to change their daily habits. Moreover, on the grounds that the standards of living keep getting higher everyday, everyone has to work extremely hard to pay for their needs and literally has no time for other things, including exercises. In some highly developed countries like Japan, workers may even work from early in the morning till late night to meet the high demands of the society. Therefore, they are too tired to do anything but working.
Turning to the solutions, one of the things we can do to stop this problem is to create a better work-life balance for everyone. This means employers and companies shouldn't put too much pressure on their workers, so that after working hours they will have their own leisure time to exercise more and try new hobbies. This will not only improve their fitness but also lead to a better mental health. Additionally, we should encourage citizens to take part in sports activities by building more facilities and upgrading already-existing infrastructure. Ideally, every neighbourhood should has its own sports centre, or at least some equipment like tennis court, running machines or walking lanes. If this solution were to be properly carried out, the levels of health and fitness would be greatly improved.
To sum up, changes in the modern world would be the main reason responsible for the higher average weight of people these days, but there are many ways by which we can stop this and better the situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...standards of living keep getting higher everyday, everyone has to work extremely hard to...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...one. This means employers and companies shouldnt put too much pressure on their workers,...
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Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...re. Ideally, every neighbourhood should has its own sports centre, or at least some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, at least, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01630434783 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64672797069 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614130434783 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3402070463 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.375 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205422967002 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634905701851 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421692214356 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124387263738 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295332703146 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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