In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to show them ?
In this modern world, the rate of people suffered overweight state is rising remarkably and that is accompanied by lower health quality. There are some reasons related to this issue, but many possible measures can be used to prevent it
The increase in people’s weight has a vital connection with the considerable change of lifestyle. Firstly, the constant development of equipment has made life more comfortable and convenient than ever before. Robots are gradually replacing human’s role in not only important but also trivial activities. Regardless of whether people are in the office or at home, they just sit in a fixed place, control everything through computers or smartphones and move around by cars, motorbikes,…All of these examples illustrate human’s sedentary lifestyle. Furthermore, the overconsumption of fast food and the decline in the amount of time to sleep are fostered due to the rapid pace of life and pressure from workloads or study.
There are several measures that could be taken to tackle the problems described above. First of all, the government and companies should join hands to build an active environment. Policies such as declining the cost of bus tickets, increasing taxes on cars, motorbikes,.. must be implemented to enhance people to use public transports, bicycles or go on foot. For example, free bikes are provided for citizens’ movement everywhere on the streets in the Netherlands. Another good example is that Google builds the working setting integrated with sports, entertainment facilities,..to foster staff’s exercise and physical relaxation. In addition, it is of great importance to raise people’s awareness of a suitable lifestyle. The knowledge of how to have a healthy diet and balance between work and rest should be popularized to everyone to avoid diseases like obesity, heart attack,..putting people’s health in danger.
In conclusion, there are many reasons behind the upward trend in people’s weight and the above-mentioned solutions deserve further consideration.
- Many people agree that education should be compulsory to all children until a certain age Others however argue that children and their families should be free to choose when to leave school To what extent do you agree or disagree 89
- In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to show them 89
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53503184713 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19557383859 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662420382166 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8896262571 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.866666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157035866148 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460110708184 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562893112799 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835056868998 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285172093786 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.