In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
The trend of obesity is raising significantly as well as the healthy levels of the public are dropping. These measures cannot be ignored since the bringing problems are seriously. I believe that the eating habit and the working hour are the factors to cause the above matters.
To begin with, the unbalanced eating habit is one of the resources of arising weight. For instance, the eating culture in hong kong, where is an international city, is poor and unhealthy, residents usually eat on the fast food restaurants or even take away from supermarkets because of the convenience level is quite high that the shops are only nearby their flats. Therefore, the opportunities of eating unhealthy foods are really large rather than cooking at home by themselves. Furthermore, it is undeniable that the working hours in some countries are long. In hong kong, the average working hours for each employer are normally 10 hours, which take almost a half day of a person as far as the transport method is also long. Thus, the employees are not able to get a training time to strengthen their body.
The measurements should appropriate to reduce the above circumstances. As for the worse eating habit, the government may restrict the quantities of snack or potato chips in the supermarket as well as tax for customers who what to buy the unhealthy goods to change the atmosphere of eating habit. On the other hand, promoting a policy to shorten the working hours of the employees from the government can also rises the sporting interest of the publics to prompt the fitness body of the inhabitants.
In conclusion, as the raising weight and the declining fitness levels are come from bad eating hobbies as well as long working hours, the measurements of reducing the numbers of unhealthy goods and decrease working hours may be effective.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'rise'
Suggestion: rise
... employees from the government can also rises the sporting interest of the publics to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as for, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93527508091 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76680670865 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556634304207 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0050716675 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.307692308 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130600120589 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481339374935 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389668263598 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870869392087 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284318972313 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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