Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
Teaching kids is the important mission of every parents and even society. Doing part time jobs is considered as a way to teach teenagers. However, in a few countries, this way seems not be encourage and I also agree with this opinion.
With respect to part time job benefits, we cannot refuse that it helps teenagers know the values of life. For example, they can understand that earning money is difficult so they should use it in the smart ways. They also learn soft skills through doing these jobs. Notwithstanding, these benefits cannot outweigh its drawback because teenagers still do not have enough abilities to protect themselves. They may do unsuitable jobs or do not receive payment which is not worth with their work. Sexual abuse, being happen more and more recently, is a dangerous issue for them. Teenagers are lack of experiments to protect themselves when being in this situation. This problem becomes more seriously when parents hardly know it because the victims, being threaten, do not dare to tell another what had been/was happen.
On the other hand, there are many other ways to learn soft skills instead of doing part time jobs. Such as, teenagers can join campaigns which help them make friends and learn new things too. Doing charity should be considered because it teaches them about sharing and sympathy. Even when staying at home, they can still learn such things through helping their parents do housework.
In conclusion, part time jobs are more suitable for people who are older than teenagers. They should wait until strong enough to solve the problems that can go along with these jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, still, even so, for example, in conclusion, such as, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1352.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95238095238 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39610842565 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586080586081 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2249418487 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5294117647 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0588235294 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1299644253 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471656819371 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514359763394 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087251915423 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150421538131 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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