In some countries, fast food restaurants and companies give money to schools provided that the school promote their products to school children.
What do you think is positive and negative of this in the development of children
It is a popular way in some places that schools gain part of their funding from fast-food restaurants and corporates, which allows their products to be promoted at school. In my opinion, it has strengths and weaknesses for children's development.
On the one hand, funding from the fast food industry can provide school students with better educational resources. Firstly, extra money raised from these companies can be used to renovate old teaching and learning buildings and update teaching facilities, which enable students to learn in a more comfortable learning environment and have access to modern teaching technology. Secondly, funding from private companies allowing schools to allocate this part of money freely, which can make the most use of it, compared with national funding which can be only used on a particular purpose. For example, teachers and students can be more motivated if use part of the funding as a reward for their efforts and progress.
On the other hand, advertising products in school can be exploitative and unethical. These products which are always promoted in an attractive way with eye-catchy pictures are aimed at students, who are easily influenced by advertisements, and may put pressure on their parents to buy things for them. Furthermore, promoting fatty, sugary and salty fast food in school may lead to an unhealthy diet which is related to health issues, such as obesity, heart attack and diabetes. A survey conducted by the Department of Education, for instance, showed that nearly 80% of overweight students obtain excessive calories from junk food sold at or near schools.
In conclusion, accepting funding from the fast food industry and promoting junk food in school has both advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, with proper regulations, its strengths will overweigh its drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an attractive way" with adverb for "attractive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3595890411 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89415780001 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565068493151 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8536131951 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.416666667 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251390351887 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102776036939 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892630661625 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181781144194 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879987612896 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.