In some countries, fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Indubitably, in the recent time businesses is extremely vital in era.Some nation’s consider that fast food hotels and shopping malls provide the money to schools to offering their products.I believe that it can affect both negative and positively for several reasons.This essay will critique both aspects and in ensuring paragraphs with pertinent examples.
To embark with, there are many positive development in schools.schools can benefit from them give some money and investing in school’s development and creating more facilities for school such as building a gym, new library, new rooms so on. For example, many supermarkets and hotels providing foods in schools and that food is very delicious, whereas other people attract the food and go to restaurants, and supermarkets. In addition, some benefits for schools, because they are allows to promote their materials.Schools give the amounts, and investing for schools.
On the other hand, there are some drawbacks for the promotes their products.Nowadays meal and shopping malls offer unhealthy packed and junk food, which is an increasing dilemma and extremely harmful for people. Some restaurants and supermarkets give money to tv and their products. Tv and newspapers are always provide the advertisements, and they money to tv and newspapers employers. For instance, daily milk chocolate adverts on tv, they are many people , children show the adverts.
In conclusion, I recapitulate that health of children is the most important.Money is not essential, but health is very important for life .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, whereas, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 239.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59414225941 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23112115788 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602510460251 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.0215658916 49.4020404114 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.555555556 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5555555556 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4444444444 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314444313924 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139203575142 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118566108313 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162415321388 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825391699421 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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