In some countries, many children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people say it is the responsibility of governments to solve this problem.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that in these days, there are growing concerns over the high rate of obesity in children. Personally, although parents and schools has their own responsibility, i would argue that many policies which should be adopted by authorities to adress this problem.
On the one hand, there is some effective measures which goverments should take to improve matters. Firstly, by introducing retricstion on the establishment of fast food stores located near schools or kindergartens, goverments could partly reduce the consumption of junk foods by youngsters. Secondly, goverments should invest in national TV chanels to make informative programmes in order to raise public awareness of balance diets and healthy lifestyles. Finally, national and local authorities could allocate resources to install essential sport gears in public places such as parks or social and community centers to allow both children and their parents to take regular excercise to maintain physical health and mental well-being.
On the other hand, families and schools should be taken into accountable for preventing obesity in children. In terms of the responsibility of parents, it is clear that parental involvement is essential in controlling eating habits and the amount of time that children can spend on watching TV and playing electronic games. They might, for instance, set a good example for their children by taking regular excercise, eating healthy meals with low fat and high fibers and not consume junk foods in their families. In addition, parents should make a cutbacks of high calories food in their family meals as well as encourage their children to take part in outdoor activities after school, such as playing football, swimming or basketball and make new friends with other younsters to prevent a sedentary lifestyle. From the perspective of schools, more nutrient classess should be held for both childrens and parents to help them recognize about the harmful of fast food. Besides, more extra-curricular should be offered to enable children to develop their social skills and improve their physical and mental health.
In conclusion, i concur with those who believed that in addition to the responsibility of family and school, goverments have partly duty to alleviate the problem of obesity and unhealthy lifestyle in children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88420420394 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567123287671 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.9219413342 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.615384615 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0769230769 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0886413335563 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036062809282 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296660882564 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0679456765453 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278748606121 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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