In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in?
These days, in some countries, parents have a tendency to put pressure on their children to spend time studying both at school and after school and take less participation in leisure activities. In my opinion, I believe that this is a negative trend that has detrimental effects on children’s health and the society at the same time.
To commence with, being forced to study for long periods of time can harm a student's physical health. It is because when children have to sit at their desk studying for a long time without breaks, they are likely to have back and eye-related problems. In fact, a recent survey in Viet Nam has revealed that more than 65% of elementary students have short-sightedness at a young age due to excessive hours of studying. In addition, pressure from parents can deprive the children of their original interest in studying. Having to study constantly without being allowed to do their favourite things, the learning process will become a burden and a critical task to children. As a result, they turn to study like motionless machines and lose the natural enthusiasm and curiosity to discover new things.
Furthermore, that parents make their kids study too much can cause negative impacts on society. As children have to spend many hours studying, there is a likelihood that they suffer from depression and stress, the stimulation of which can turn into extreme psychological disorders. Consequently, they tend to perform anti-social behaviours that hurt themselves by committing suicide and even hurt other people including their friends and families.
To conclude, I firmly believe that overpressing children to spend much time studying without partaking in outdoor activities can decrease children’s motivation to study and lead to their health problems physically and at the same time, psychologically, which also poses a threat to the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, so, thus, in addition, in fact, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94113532642 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575657894737 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6423994725 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366630907681 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132462783418 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873525845425 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234489514023 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947842603846 0.056905535591 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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