Educational systems vary across the world, some overly focus on certain subjects when children turn 15, whereas others believe that compulsory education levels should be more diverse. While the two systems have advantages, I firmly believe that school students should acquire a broad education.
On the one hand, by concentrating on particular subjects, students will cover a lot of ground in those areas subjects. For example, if a student only studies STEM subjects, they will spend all their school day learning lessons related to those subjects. Therefore, they will have a good grasp of their chosen subjects such as the anatomy of their bodies, and human evolution, and they will even gain a sound understanding of how the universe works. Moreover, STEM learning teaches students at this age about the power of technology and innovation so when they encounter new technologies, will be prepared to embrace them instead of being hesitant or fearful. Thus students is well-equipped to put the knowledge that they have gained into practice, which improves job prospects when following this educational system.
On the other hand, studying a wide range of subjects until they leave school will be more beneficial for students at the age of 15 for two important reasons. Firstly, a broad education, where a variety of subjects are taught, will be a preparation for life. Schools must encourage youngsters beyond the age of 15 to be interested in all aspects of life, by exposing them to both science and humanities subjects so they will have a wider picture of the planet and the people who are living on it, they can therefore assess things objectively from different angles. Secondly, studying things like arts, philosophy or literature alongside science subjects can help students at this age develop critical thinking, cultivate imagination and encourage creativity. They will be able to express themselves through painting, drama, and writing, taking up a musical instrument, or singing in a choir at school.
In conclusion, although at 15 students may be prepared better for work by focusing on a few subjects, a diverse curriculum will provide them larger amounts of knowledge which makes them feel well-prepared for life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22562674095 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8206145189 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587743732591 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.1392053754 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.307692308 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6153846154 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360731602791 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130912962909 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806331965198 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214403788579 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629304976904 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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