According to some educationalists, curriculums in secondary school should add art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art, and craft.
I strongly agree with the statement for several reasons; art has a positive impact on opening pupils' minds in school, it adds colourful details to their daily life.
This component will also be beneficial because it will stimulate each student's individual talent and skills. It improves students' overall academic performance and enriches their creativity and teamwork experiences during their years of studies.
Nowadays, students with a multi-background education, such as science and art, have more skills and can harmoniously mix different fields.
A recent report published by a group of scientists at the University of Ankara shows that 80 % of higher scored projects are issued from a mixture of different sectors. It makes projects more successful and well distinguished.
On the other hand, this open-minded attitude stimulates innovation and creativity in students. Arts help students to develop their skills and discover their talents. I remember when my Music teacher insisted on making me try to play the recorder. I was timid, and I couldn't imagine that I could do it. But, after two lessons I realised that it was easy for me, then I enjoyed it. Then over time, it became the best hobby in my free time. This personal experience convinces me that a lot of talents are hidden in depth of each human being.
In conclusion, art-based subjects are essential for students, and they will be beneficial for future generations. So, I strongly encourage governments actions toward this issue.
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- Some educationalists argue that non exam arts based subjects such as music drama art and craft should be compulsory in the secondary school curriculum They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance To what extent do yo 61
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, then, well, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97357010516 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.673076923077 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9834739276 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.75 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220702401868 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603768388026 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104175575828 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117963002458 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131369929268 0.056905535591 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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