Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to go to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People hold differing views about whether it is better for high school graduates to start working immediately after graduation or spend four or five years at higher education providers. From my point of view, although having employment soon would have some noticeable benefits, receiving tertiary education certainly creates more working opportunities for students.
On the first hand, there are several compelling explanations why landing for a job after school helps facilitate graduates’ ability to be succeed in their chosen fields, and the most convincing one is that in the modern day’s workplace, employers attach greater importance on hands-on experience than academic qualifications. This is attributable to the reality that the way employees solve their arising situations can make him or her eligible for the higher position, and problem-solving skills are usually sharpened in real-life experience, not in academic environment. By way of illustration, high school graduate who decides to start out as a waiter at a local restaurant has more opportunity to strengthen their skills in dealing with complaint from fussy diners; therefore, he may be promoted to the restaurant manager. Meanwhile, a university graduate that spent four to five years pursuing a bachelor’s degree might find it harder to climb to the same level, simply because of his comparatively fewer years of practical experience, which is usually not taught through university lectures.
On the other hand, I am of an opinion that it is more advisable for youngsters who have just left school to spend several years at a higher level of education if they plan on a glorious and prosperous working life. A host of persuasive reasons could be identified, and the one that is well worth mentioning is that nowadays a majority of job hunters have possessed a certain amount of expertise knowledge, which is supposed to be derived through academic training courses at high-educational facilities. Take an example of general practitioner, which is a highly professional job that individuals without allocating four to six years for medical training have no hope to do, let alone to make it to the top. In other words, academically trained graduates might have more employment opportunities than the ones who embark on a career right after high school.
To sum up, students recently have graduated from high school can obtain various benefits from either option: applying their CVs for a job soon after graduation or dedicate four to five years at university lecture halls. Nonetheless, I lean towards the idea that desirable achievement are prone to come with the ones who invest several years of their life in tertiary education.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, while, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31395348837 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03969057091 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4189851104 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.416666667 106.682146367 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.8333333333 20.7667163134 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11718713653 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490135866807 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369025173033 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802705886734 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210667202016 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 13.0946893788 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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